Horus stories

[Grain]

After reading these. I decided to write my own, I hope you don't mind. There could be more, but I can put no due date on them.


A tremor split through in waves as the ground cracked open, gas and dust spewing forth like the breath of a god rising from slumber. A dark look stretches across a face observing the tragedy as stone and flesh became one and all were lost to the maelstrom made of earth and bones. Such a destructive force and such a beautiful use, how could anyone pass up the opportunity to destroy something that was once revered? The great church that once stood at the center of a once great city known as Montsognir, now swirled into oblivion with the rest of its buildings.
“In their place I shall put them all,
cast down hand in hand
Destroyed and tattered it shall be
Wasted away with its land ”
The twisted form of a dark elf stood atop the withering heights, Plunder had seen to the destruction of the Alsirian capital with ease after Efrendi and his barbarians had broken the great wall. No doubt Alsius would attempt a counter attack soon and a change of location was necessary. The Ignean hunters constantly reporting troop movements and the locations of key targets had now begun the assassinations. Many of the high ranking Alsirians would be found drained of blood and stripped of flesh, a warning to the nation to terrify and shock the enemy.
As many of the population were trying to flee the realm they found what once kept them safe now served as their demise. The great walls gate was destroyed and now lay in splinters around the wall, a line of marksmen guarded by impenetrable wall of knights now acted as a firing squad to any trying to escape the onslaught happening within. Dimera knocked another arrow and sent it through the heart of some poor Alsian soul as so many crashed against the shields of Lexen, Wes and many other knights.
Efrendi, Smurv and Kalida had been moving about as a satellite force to the main. As Smurv pulled his blood red spear from the back of yet another Uthgar, the three turned as the ground started shaking. Fire embers and ash began falling from the sky as Rhanya and La had started calling meteors down on their unaware targets. Smurv spun around locking his shield above him providing a deflecting barrier for Efrendi and Kalida. Seeing the two warlocks Efrendi had started to go into a fenzy as the meteors hit. The loud roar of the barbarians shook the mages as the barbarians charged “Leave nothing of them left!” Dirt and leaves twisted through the air spiralling around the warriors locking them in place. Kalida issued forth a mighty howl dizzying all around. Suddenly the ground shifted as overbearing skulls appeared above the party pressing them all to the ground. Ulrin had shown his slimy self yet again and after the three were able to stand again the mages had vanished. “Quickly, we must regroup with the others, do not chase these dogs” Efrendi commanded as they started back towards the gate.
The destruction of Alsius had begun to cease as Ignis began pulling out of the now battered realm. Their work here was done for now, not wanting to completely destroy the Alsirian Empire, but to let them know where they stood after the three month war against Ignis taken to their great wall. A message as it were to let them know their beloved army could no longer be organized and no more would they threaten the Ignean way of life.

Miraculix and Rulez had arrived home informing Anpu and the rest of The Inquisition of the attack on Alsius. As word spread throughout Syrtis the factions began forming an army capable of not only defending the realm, but also decimating any that stood against it. Soon Ignis and Alsius alike will feel the wrath of the entire Syrtian nation.

[Dark_Barbarian]

in a land with choas and little order, Dark Barbarian son of Gregory Shadowblade seeks to help restore Balence to the realm of ignis.

Dark Barbarian at the age of 12 started training with a sword (a dagger). he begain thinking and wondering of the possibilty of what he can become useing 2 handed weapons strikeing his oppents with fear and rage or become a knight use a weapon and shield to deffened the people of ignis. once he has reach the age of 18 the real training has begon. the trainer of the city of Altaruk gave him a choice do you wish to use a 2 handed sword or a spear and a shield, Dark Barbarian was thinking for a moment then he lifted up the 2 handed long sword he practice for 24/7 with exercises and studing in the libary of what the Barbarian past was like. as he reach the age of 24 he was given a real weapon a sword like no other, a great claymore hes going to wield at his own disposl. he started slashing every single monster that stand in his way with rage and soo very little fear, every time hes done it the growth for more blood lust and battleing is getting huge at the 2nd day he past out with tiredness, he would of died but a conj walking in the area found him on the ground he carried him back to his house, 2 days has passed and he woke up in a strange room only by looking up at the conjurer that was makeing some kind of soup conjurer ask " well well you woke up at last" with a smile on his face, Dark Barbarian ask "who are you" the conjurer replied "im am who you could say Dark Conjure" Dark Conjure gave Dark Barbarian some soup and he ate it with joy. 10 years have passed and Dark Barbarian grew stonger and stonger with every passing month and now he has been giveing a task from the king. the king ask if you could kill Daen Rha and bring me his heart ill give you plenty of riches as a reward. so Dark Barbarian set out to Daen Rhas domains where he was waiting for him all along, Daen rha charged but Dark Barbarian evaded all tho yet again he charged, this time Dark Barbarian was hit and Daen rha laughed, at the last min Dark Barbarian filled up with soo much rage its almost he has the stregth of 10 men, this time Dark Barbarian charge it felt like a heard of rinos where going mad daen rha tried to move but he was too afraid to do so, closer and closer Dark Barbarian came, he jumped up and slashed Daen Rha in half. Dark Barbarian tore Daen Rhas heart out with his bare hands and when he was done a chest appeard in front of him it was filled with powerful weapons he has never seen before, he took it all and walked back home and gave the heart to the king Dark Barbarian was soo rich and the king ask "do you wish to be my General?"
Dark Barbarian replied with and yes and he was a General. To be Continud


Next will be the great battle.

[makarios68]

in a land with choas and little order, Dark Barbarian son of Gregory Shadowblade seeks to help restore Balence to the realm of ignis.

Dark Barbarian at the age of 12 started training with a sword (a dagger). he begain thinking and wondering of the possibilty of what he can become useing 2 handed weapons strikeing his oppents with fear and rage or become a knight use a weapon and shield to deffened the people of ignis. once he has reach the age of 18 the real training has begon. the trainer of the city of Altaruk gave him a choice do you wish to use a 2 handed sword or a spear and a shield, Dark Barbarian was thinking for a moment then he lifted up the 2 handed long sword he practice for 24/7 with exercises and studing in the libary of what the Barbarian past was like. as he reach the age of 24 he was given a real weapon a sword like no other, a great claymore hes going to wield at his own disposl. he started slashing every single monster that stand in his way with rage and soo very little fear, every time hes done it the growth for more blood lust and battleing is getting huge at the 2nd day he past out with tiredness, he would of died but a conj walking in the area found him on the ground he carried him back to his house, 2 days has passed and he woke up in a strange room only by looking up at the conjurer that was makeing some kind of soup conjurer ask " well well you woke up at last" with a smile on his face, Dark Barbarian ask "who are you" the conjurer replied "im am who you could say Dark Conjure" Dark Conjure gave Dark Barbarian some soup and he ate it with joy. 10 years have passed and Dark Barbarian grew stonger and stonger with every passing month and now he has been giveing a task from the king. the king ask if you could kill Daen Rha and bring me his heart ill give you plenty of riches as a reward. so Dark Barbarian set out to Daen Rhas domains where he was waiting for him all along, Daen rha charged but Dark Barbarian evaded all tho yet again he charged, this time Dark Barbarian was hit and Daen rha laughed, at the last min Dark Barbarian filled up with soo much rage its almost he has the stregth of 10 men, this time Dark Barbarian charge it felt like a heard of rinos where going mad daen rha tried to move but he was too afraid to do so, closer and closer Dark Barbarian came, he jumped up and slashed Daen Rha in half. Dark Barbarian tore Daen Rhas heart out with his bare hands and when he was done a chest appeard in front of him it was filled with powerful weapons he has never seen before, he took it all and walked back home and gave the heart to the king Dark Barbarian was soo rich and the king ask "do you wish to be my General?"
Dark Barbarian replied with and yes and he was a General. To be Continud


Next will be the great battle.

Epic dude. :thumb_up:

[Angel_de_Combate]

......

Is this some kind of biography?...

[Torin_Ironfist]

Is this some kind of biography?...

It's a horus story :metal:

[Dimes]

:D cool story bro :D

[veluchami]

Nice one DB ! best part is you get healed by yourself. I guess all the chars in your story will just be you? :p

[Gawyn_Trakkand]

in a land with choas and little order, Dark Barbarian son of Gregory Shadowblade seeks to help restore Balence to the realm of ignis.

Dark Barbarian at the age of 12 started training with a sword (a dagger). he begain thinking and wondering of the possibilty of what he can become useing 2 handed weapons strikeing his oppents with fear and rage or become a knight use a weapon and shield to deffened the people of ignis. once he has reach the age of 18 the real training has begon. the trainer of the city of Altaruk gave him a choice do you wish to use a 2 handed sword or a spear and a shield, Dark Barbarian was thinking for a moment then he lifted up the 2 handed long sword he practice for 24/7 with exercises and studing in the libary of what the Barbarian past was like. as he reach the age of 24 he was given a real weapon a sword like no other, a great claymore hes going to wield at his own disposl. he started slashing every single monster that stand in his way with rage and soo very little fear, every time hes done it the growth for more blood lust and battleing is getting huge at the 2nd day he past out with tiredness, he would of died but a conj walking in the area found him on the ground he carried him back to his house, 2 days has passed and he woke up in a strange room only by looking up at the conjurer that was makeing some kind of soup conjurer ask " well well you woke up at last" with a smile on his face, Dark Barbarian ask "who are you" the conjurer replied "im am who you could say Dark Conjure" Dark Conjure gave Dark Barbarian some soup and he ate it with joy. 10 years have passed and Dark Barbarian grew stonger and stonger with every passing month and now he has been giveing a task from the king. the king ask if you could kill Daen Rha and bring me his heart ill give you plenty of riches as a reward. so Dark Barbarian set out to Daen Rhas domains where he was waiting for him all along, Daen rha charged but Dark Barbarian evaded all tho yet again he charged, this time Dark Barbarian was hit and Daen rha laughed, at the last min Dark Barbarian filled up with soo much rage its almost he has the stregth of 10 men, this time Dark Barbarian charge it felt like a heard of rinos where going mad daen rha tried to move but he was too afraid to do so, closer and closer Dark Barbarian came, he jumped up and slashed Daen Rha in half. Dark Barbarian tore Daen Rhas heart out with his bare hands and when he was done a chest appeard in front of him it was filled with powerful weapons he has never seen before, he took it all and walked back home and gave the heart to the king Dark Barbarian was soo rich and the king ask "do you wish to be my General?"
Dark Barbarian replied with and yes and he was a General. To be Continud


Next will be the great battle.


seriously DB nice story an all it just needs some montage music and that would be as good as a kevin costner film no wait maybe even highlander three.

Jokes aside you do need to look at spelling DB, but thats an aweful lot of obvious errors. If you are serious about writing stories then why not get a friend to proof read and correct them for you?

[craiyzee]

in a land with choas and little order, Dark Barbarian son of Gregory Shadowblade seeks to help restore Balence to the realm of ignis.

Dark Barbarian at the age of 12 started training with a sword (a dagger). he begain thinking and wondering of the possibilty of what he can become useing 2 handed weapons strikeing his oppents with fear and rage or become a knight use a weapon and shield to deffened the people of ignis. once he has reach the age of 18 the real training has begon. the trainer of the city of Altaruk gave him a choice do you wish to use a 2 handed sword or a spear and a shield, Dark Barbarian was thinking for a moment then he lifted up the 2 handed long sword he practice for 24/7 with exercises and studing in the libary of what the Barbarian past was like. as he reach the age of 24 he was given a real weapon a sword like no other, a great claymore hes going to wield at his own disposl. he started slashing every single monster that stand in his way with rage and soo very little fear, every time hes done it the growth for more blood lust and battleing is getting huge at the 2nd day he past out with tiredness, he would of died but a conj walking in the area found him on the ground he carried him back to his house, 2 days has passed and he woke up in a strange room only by looking up at the conjurer that was makeing some kind of soup conjurer ask " well well you woke up at last" with a smile on his face, Dark Barbarian ask "who are you" the conjurer replied "im am who you could say Dark Conjure" Dark Conjure gave Dark Barbarian some soup and he ate it with joy. 10 years have passed and Dark Barbarian grew stonger and stonger with every passing month and now he has been giveing a task from the king. the king ask if you could kill Daen Rha and bring me his heart ill give you plenty of riches as a reward. so Dark Barbarian set out to Daen Rhas domains where he was waiting for him all along, Daen rha charged but Dark Barbarian evaded all tho yet again he charged, this time Dark Barbarian was hit and Daen rha laughed, at the last min Dark Barbarian filled up with soo much rage its almost he has the stregth of 10 men, this time Dark Barbarian charge it felt like a heard of rinos where going mad daen rha tried to move but he was too afraid to do so, closer and closer Dark Barbarian came, he jumped up and slashed Daen Rha in half. Dark Barbarian tore Daen Rhas heart out with his bare hands and when he was done a chest appeard in front of him it was filled with powerful weapons he has never seen before, he took it all and walked back home and gave the heart to the king Dark Barbarian was soo rich and the king ask "do you wish to be my General?"
Dark Barbarian replied with and yes and he was a General. To be Continud


Next will be the great battle.

Nice one DB! Keep up the good work :D

[Altara]

Jokes aside you do need to look at spelling DB, i know i'm getting ridden a bit by vythica to watch my grammer and spelling but thats an aweful lot of obvious errors. If you are serious about writing stories then why not get a friend to proof read and correct them for you?

Grammar*
awful*
And you should use Capital I's dear :[[

haha. Jokes aside
Good story DB Cant wait for the next :D

[Immune]

Grammar*
awful*
And you should use Capital I's dear :[[

haha. Jokes aside
Good story DB Cant wait for the next :D
Lol I saw those earlier but I didn't want to be the one to point them out. Not this time at least.

[Mattdoesrock]

Gawyn mate, sorry, but you've been replaced.

[Pwnography]

Gawyn mate, sorry, but you've been replaced.

Yup,this is mutiny

[Comp]

Once upon a time, in a land far, far away where the wind blew and the winters were cold, lived an elder goat named Inkster. Inkster lived off the land, eating twigs, berries, and grass until one day he realized.......HOLY F*CK I gotta take a dump!!

Inkster ran to the bushes with haste and pushed...pushed...and pushed for hours until finally - PLOP! Out came a mighty SH*T who was tough as nails and sneakier than herpies....yes - twas Compost!

The end!

[Flightcap]

Hijaaaaacked! We need new threads for these new storylines, or a separate fansite, or something to keep authors from getting mixed together. xD Good stories all though! Compost........:sifflote:

[Inkster]

'the wind blows,

In the wind, the mages hear from afar... INKSTER will never come to our aid

[Kyrottimus]

'the wind blows,

In the wind, the mages hear from afar... INKSTER will never come to our aid

...and in the distance, a baby cries....

[Mbwana]

Gawyn mate, sorry, but you've been replaced.

alas and indeed....hey! since everyone's doing it, maybe I should write something myself xD

(nice writing Grain, and Gawyn: hurry up! your fans are leaving you :sifflote:)

[Angel_de_Combate]

Hijaaaaacked! We need new threads for these new storylines, or a separate fansite, or something to keep authors from getting mixed together.

+1 for this

[Dark_Barbarian]

Dark Barbarian got the rank of General and lead his army into battle. He killed a lot of syrtis at herberd fort, once he got the fort all of a sudden some cloud was heading to the fort all looked up Dark Barbarian said "GET YOUR ASSES TO COVER ITS A ARROW CLOUD" every one got to cover as a rain of arrows hit the fort, Dark Barbarian heard some of his men dieing but most Servived. As the rain of arrow stoped their was one conjuerer there it was Isemon that conj the cloud of arrows. Dark Barbarian was no match for him, out of no where Wyatt appeard to aid Dark Barbarian. General Wyatt and his mage army came.Then Isemon called his syrtis army. yet again a mage came out of no where near the fort. it was a Warlock name Batlin. Batlin cast spike field and half the syrtis army was killed. Batlin cast a more powerful spell it was a huge meteor and it detroyed the whole syrtis army takeing Isemon with it. at last herbred was in ignis control. To be cont'd



Next is the battle for Eferias castle

[UmarilsStillHere]

Faith watched this spectacle fell over laughing and died.

You should totaly make your own thread for these :thumb_up:

[NotScias]

Next is the battle for Eferias castle

Oh noes !! WE'R GONNA BE INFADED !

[linearguild]

Batlin cast spike field and half the syrtis army was killed. Batlin cast a more powerful spell it was a huge meteor and it detroyed the whole syrtis army takeing Isemon with it.

Batlin == Evendim?

/me ponders.

[Immune]

herberd
dieing
Servived
stoped
conjuerer
no where
takeing


Must... restrain... spellcheck reflexes... (Notice I didn't include grammar... like "the rain of arrow") Also, WTF conjurers have "arrow cloud" spells? I wants it!!!

[Kyrottimus]

Easy fellas, DB is contributing to "HORUS STORIES" and doing darn good job :thumb_up:

The storyline of the Original Poster still obviously holds its integrity just fine... :razz:

Keep it up Dark Barbarian, I can't wait to see how the battle at Eferias turns out :D

[Flightcap]

Ty to whichever mod (I assume it was a mod?) moved all these around. Now we can enjoy all the stories without confusion. :thumb_up:

[Torin_Ironfist]

Why did the mod seperate 1 of the stories from the other 2. There should be a new topic for each(Grain's and DB's and Gawyn's?) or all in 1 topic...

[Altara]

Why did the mod seperate 1 of the stories from the other 2. There should be a new topic for each(Grain's and DB's and Gawyn's?) or all in 1 topic...

I would have to agree, OTHER horus stories sounds abit demeaning as if Gawyns stories are better then these and are the horus stories

[bois]

Sorry DB I could not read through it all. The whole block is an irritating mass of white for me (not the storyline).

Try to break your paragraphs into blocks with spaces like I did here. One thought per paragraph . The readability is poor.
The story may be good but I simply will not get a headache trying to read through the one compacted mass. Sorry mate.

I will read your next instalment providing the readability improves.

Regards
Artec

[Dannboy]

I'm lovin' it.

[Angel_de_Combate]

Why did the mod seperate 1 of the stories from the other 2. There should be a new topic for each(Grain's and DB's and Gawyn's?) or all in 1 topic...

Im sure Grain and DB can make their own thread for themselves.

Gawyn made the thread for his stories not other people's, a mod kindly made a thread just for this purpose.

[Llayne]

Once again DB steals the show. Nice though.

[chris32finney]

Who the hell died and made you the god of horus stories??? surely anyone can post a story here!! yeah your stories are good but surely other people are allowed to post stuff too!! I personally liked DB's story, shouldnt it be for all people who want to write a story? Go on flame away i dont give a shit.

[UmarilsStillHere]

Why does it matter Chris? Gawyn made a thread for his own stuff flooding someone elses thread with your own stuff is disrespectfull. And since the story lines are seperate have no place in that thread, its not hard to make your own thread instead of moving in on someone elses same as any othert part of the forum.

Gawyn made his thread for his storys, not for Grains, which are good and if he wants to carry on warrent their own thread, or DB's which are just so bad their good.

Nothing stops you from just making their own threads if they want to continue with their story line, then the issue is delt with.

[Gawyn_Trakkand]

Who the hell died and made you the god of horus stories??? surely anyone can post a story here!! yeah your stories are good but surely other people are allowed to post stuff too!! I personally liked DB's story, shouldnt it be for all people who want to write a story? Go on flame away i dont give a shit.

I'm not a God i agree (though damn near), but you're forgetting how can I move posts from one thread to another.... oh wait. I can't. A dev moved these stories to this thread, yes they are the Gods of Horus stories and all threads on this forum. I'm not flaming you i'm just pointing out I couldnt have possibly done this so dont flame me for it.

[Jippy]

agreed, the Devs think ur god lol...