Horus story the legend of Dark Barbarian

[Dark_Barbarian]

Chapter 3 the Battle for Eferias Castle

Once again, where we left off Dark Barbarian the Legendary Barbarian sets off to Herbred fort and he has already Conqerd it.

Dark Barbarian sets his army to Move South and Wyatt's force heads north to Algaros fort. there DB gets troubled on how nearly its impossible to get Eferias castle, Eferias castle holds a warlock named Nightchill, the master and Lord of all the warlocks in the known land of syrtis.

DB sends a scout into Eferias castle, 3 days have past he has never returned. DB feared that Nightchill has already sense he was coming and already feasted on his scouts blood and soul.

DB goes on ahead of the force, there he said "stand down i have a message". DB and Nightchill have talked for 3 hours, DB walks out of the castle unharmed and DB says "OK every one its time to turn this fortress to dust" DB's men froze for a few secs then they cheered him on.

DB falls back into the middle of the group archers moved to the front along them where knights with towering shields, archers fired at the wall of archers, the archers on the wall fired back, DB used a powerful tacticed to turn the tide of battle. he order the archers to the back, all the knights moved up fast and all the arrows where blocked, all the archers on the wall where dead and wounded.

DB and his army charged with DB's power he jumped into the air and with a power strike the door was completely crushed. Nightchill unleashed a powerful wave of fire, DB fell stomach flat on the ground the wave past him with a few scorch marks on his back, with in sec his whole army was torn to ashes DB burst with rage, Nightchill got the upper hand of his power and drained his Strength, DB got weaker and weaker and Nightchill grew ever SO stronger, with luck DB Hold up the Divine slayer sword, all of that power was countered back, DB strength grew Nightchill got weaker.

it is said to legend the divine slayer was crafted by the ancient gods 4000 years ago for daen rha to use it is said hold the power to counter a stronger magic force way beyond the spiritual plain where all of the magic force is made and it is said that beyond the spiritual plain is nothing but pure energy Strong as the force of life, DB took advantage of what the ancient scrolls that have said what is beyond the spiritual plain and it has also said to what ancient weapon can counter it, DB chose very wise.

nightchill got SO weak and couldn't move he was flat on his back. DB got up and stabbed him in the chest with the divine slayer, the divine slayer took up nightchill life force to feed its self and now the battle of eferias castle ended.

next chapter is the Great Apocalypse.

To be Continued

[tikinho]

Cool story, only the lag and the low fps are missing to be a real one.

Can't wait for the Continude.

[Torin_Ironfist]

Loved the story DB

Just wondering, will the continude have nekkids in it?

[Pizdzius]

http://cdn3.knowyourmeme.com/i/23057/original/Cool-Dog-Hey-Cool-story-bro41.jpg

[Arafails]

Yo DB, could you help out us peeps with mild dyslexia and split it out into paragraphs?

Cheers.

[Mattdoesrock]

I'm speechless.

[Pizdzius]

Ok, let me be honest with you, as we usually prefer to stay "positively sarcastic".

You should fix those words:


Conqerd
trubled
impssible
returnd
feard
sence
comming
every one
tacticed
he order the archers
chrushed
stomac
counterd
spirituel
spirituel
advantige
anceint
couldent
stabed
Continude


Also, decide when writing, which time you're using. Whether past simple, continuous, or the present. It's impossible to get the action of anything you have written. I admit myself, not being a native speaker, that it's very hard for me to learn english grammar, but at least I am trying to be as clear as I can.

And maybe learn how to use punctuation. "." "," are basics of communication.
And a paragraph or two are nice, it's used for dividing a column of text to smaller, tight in construction, easy to understand and assimilate parts.

And it's all very very brief. Try to dig up what's dramaturgy and suspense. Prolong what's useful to build a psychological tension.

:) I hope I helped.

I know it's very important to express what's in your mind as quickly as possible, but sit down and write it down in notepad. Then sit for a longer time, fix all mistakes and add some more thought to it.

[j4np0l]

with luck DB Hold up the Divine slayer sword...
...but before that, he threatened to commit suicide several times because the gods didn`t want to give him the sword:

http://www.regnumonline.com.ar/forum/showthread.php?t=59777

[Pizdzius]

...but before that, he threatened to commit suicide several times because the gods didn`t want to give him the sword:

http://www.regnumonline.com.ar/forum/showthread.php?t=59777

Let the boy have his imagination :)

[j4np0l]

Let the boy have his imagination :)
Let me have mine :)

It was just a funny comment, I like his story ;)

[Angel_de_Combate]

Let me have mine :)

It was just a funny comment, I like his story ;)

It made my eyes hurt.

[j4np0l]

It made my eyes hurt.

Yeah, that too xD

[Anpu]

You should fix those words:
....

I suggest NGD to install forum mod "Spelling check". Might be useful.

[Gytha_Ogg]

I like the story so far...sure is lucky (for DB!) that he had that sword.

How did DB happen to come into possession of that sword? That might be a tale worth telling as well. Did a mob drop it? Long nights in dusty libraries? Merchants bribed? Throats cut?

It might be interesting to weave some of those details into future chapters.

the divine slayer took up nightchill life force to feed its self

So it has a 'self', does it have a will of its own? What happens if its will conflicts with DB's?

And of course, Torin's burning question:
will the continude have nekkids in it? :rolleyes2:

[Dark_Barbarian]

Chapter 4 The Great Apocalypse

Dark Barbarian has conqerd the syrtis warzone now he presses on to the syrtis gate. Wyatt the leader of the Dark Legion and one of DB's Friends regroups on the road and mass his army in the woods, DB had a feeling like hes being watched.

he strays away from camp and goes deeper into the forest out of no where Biwie appeard and said "Dark Barbarian you will leave this sacred place at first light". then Biwie walk into the mist Dark Barbarian drew hes throw axe and throws it at him but he was gone before it hit him like he was a ghost or something.

when day light came Dark Barbarian and wyatt made their way to the syrtis gate. Nel one of Nightchills loyal friends was there DB said "surrender now ill spare you and your lands refuse and ill turn syrtis into a waste land of fire and ash". Nel refused her his offer and made a different one "DB we have a different offer come to our arena and battle our most powerful hunter if you win you can take the syrtis land if you lose we take all your forts and your castle".

DB completely froze of how overwhelming it is on that offer. DB said "you have a deal ill fight your most powerful hunter". nel said "good leave your army here at the gate bring any weapon you desire". DB chose the divine slayer he made his way to the arena, the crowd boo and insulted and abuse DB but he ignored their stupidity.

the crowd silenced and Nel was on the top platform nel said "here we have Dark Barbarian Prince of ignis and over their we have Biwie the master of the bow and lord of the Forests". the crowd cheered biwie on DB drew his sword out, Biwie pulled his bow back and then the battle was on.

Dark Barbarian charged like a herd of rhinos charging. he jumped up and his sword smashed the ground where biwie was at. biwie moved like a humming bird and dodged DBs powerful attack. DB looks behind and he had has 2 arrows in his back he pulled them out and endured the pain.

Biwie jumped into the sun DB looked up and over 20 arrows rained down on him biwie jumped down like a feather. DBs rage grew and grew he smashed the arena floor with his sword the arena was coved in fire and ash like when a volcano cools after it erupts.

DB once again charged like a herd of rhinos biwie got SO detracted by this volcanic area. DB jumped into the air and smashed biwie with his most powerful strike. biwie was like 20 feet into the ground every bone in his body was crushed. DB calls his army to attack the syrtis gate. nel fled but DB knows she will be back. DB has conqerd the syrtis lands.

next is Aggersborg Strike.

to be Continued

[Dark_Barbarian]

...but before that, he threatened to commit suicide several times because the gods didn`t want to give him the sword:

http://www.regnumonline.com.ar/forum/showthread.php?t=59777

dude he gets all the daen rha stuff in chapter 1 you need to go back and read in the thread named horus stories:rolleyes2:

[j4np0l]

dude he gets all the daen rha stuff in chapter 1 you need to go back and read in the thread named horus stories:rolleyes2:
And you need to understand a joke xD

In the other thread (Link here (http://www.regnumonline.com.ar/forum/showthread.php?t=59777)) your said you were going to leave the game because you couldn't get an epic sword....the part of your story that mentions the "Divine slayer sword" reminded me of that other thread....

[UmarilsStillHere]

Are you going to pay to fix that hole in the arena floor? Because I sure as hell aint.

[Mattdoesrock]

if you win you can take the syrtis land if you lose we take all your forts and your castle".

http://img94.imageshack.us/img94/60/allyourbasel.jpg

[Gytha_Ogg]

next is Aggersborg Strike.

Uh oh.

Shoulda seen that coming.


I think we'll win, though! :D

[Dark_Barbarian]

syrtis wants the forts and castle cos its ignis only deffence if syrtis has takeing them makes ignis deffenceless.

[Pizdzius]

Bawwww seems like DB didn't even read my suggestions ;)

[PT_DaAr_PT]

dude he gets all the daen rha stuff in chapter 1 you need to go back and read in the thread named horus stories:rolleyes2:

You should post them here, I'm too lazy to look for them. :P

[NotScias]

Nel one of Nightchills loyal friends

roflmao :clapclap:

[Dark_Barbarian]

its just a story i like makeing in random characters to fit it well

[Dark_Barbarian]

you all will faint from what chapter 6 will be ;)

[_Enio_]

you all will faint from what chapter 6 will be ;)

Hahaha DB, i am curious what will happen there, for real LOL

[Syd_Vicious]

Hahaha DB, i am curious what will happen there, for real LOL

I probably get killed slowly with a spoon and Rhanya uses the Great Staff of Gonorrhea to send DB to the free clinic xD

though maybe he should concentrate on writing 5 because he just finished 4

[Dark_Barbarian]

ha ha lol spelling check is awesome i love it hehehe

[Dark_Barbarian]

Chapter 5 Aggersborg Strike.

2 years went by and DB presses on to Aggersborg Fort and he came with his most trusted friend General Efrendi. DB and Efrendi make their way to the fort when they where ambushed by Poe but Poe alone.

DB slashed his head off before he even pulled an arrow out of his quiver. DB and his army marched to Aggersborg fort where Queen Rhanya has made it a Mining colony/Fort.

DB halted at the near by Rock and he saw weapons he never seen before they where catapults and DB has heard of them in the intel that one of the Generals said in the meeting. DB went back to the army and he called his old friend wyatt for help.

Wyatt came with in a flash of light, DB's army marched forward. Wyatt put his staff in the middle of the army and a great barrier was formed Rhanya knew exactly what DB was going to do Rhanya conjured the Spirits of the underworld and wyatt was attack.

DB did every thing he could but its just like they where not there wyatt's energy was drained the barrier went down and the great battle commenced.

DB charged like a herd of rhinos he jumped into the air hit the door and DB went flying back 120 MPH he hit a rock and fell unconscious but the rock was smashed.

the fight went on for 12 hours DB woke up and rhanya stood alone by him, DB was lifted up by her mind power and was thrown, Rhanya did it again and he hit a tree DB got up and Rhanya walked away to the alsius gate.

DB wondered why she didn't kill him and the battle of aggers ended DB saw his best Friend efrendi died near the flag. wyatt was asleep in Crystal Hyphenation to Regen his energy.

Crystal Hyphenation is what all Mages do when there energy is completely gone there whole body Freezes into a rock of the the most hardest and most Valuable thing in the regnum world.

Next is the Siege of Imperia Castle

[PT_DaAr_PT]

in a land with choas and little order, Dark Barbarian son of Gregory Shadowblade seeks to help restore Balence to the realm of ignis.

Dark Barbarian at the age of 12 started training with a sword (a dagger). he begain thinking and wondering of the possibilty of what he can become useing 2 handed weapons strikeing his oppents with fear and rage or become a knight use a weapon and shield to deffened the people of ignis. once he has reach the age of 18 the real training has begon. the trainer of the city of Altaruk gave him a choice do you wish to use a 2 handed sword or a spear and a shield, Dark Barbarian was thinking for a moment then he lifted up the 2 handed long sword he practice for 24/7 with exercises and studing in the libary of what the Barbarian past was like. as he reach the age of 24 he was given a real weapon a sword like no other, a great claymore hes going to wield at his own disposl. he started slashing every single monster that stand in his way with rage and soo very little fear, every time hes done it the growth for more blood lust and battleing is getting huge at the 2nd day he past out with tiredness, he would of died but a conj walking in the area found him on the ground he carried him back to his house, 2 days has passed and he woke up in a strange room only by looking up at the conjurer that was makeing some kind of soup conjurer ask " well well you woke up at last" with a smile on his face, Dark Barbarian ask "who are you" the conjurer replied "im am who you could say Dark Conjure" Dark Conjure gave Dark Barbarian some soup and he ate it with joy. 10 years have passed and Dark Barbarian grew stonger and stonger with every passing month and now he has been giveing a task from the king. the king ask if you could kill Daen Rha and bring me his heart ill give you plenty of riches as a reward. so Dark Barbarian set out to Daen Rhas domains where he was waiting for him all along, Daen rha charged but Dark Barbarian evaded all tho yet again he charged, this time Dark Barbarian was hit and Daen rha laughed, at the last min Dark Barbarian filled up with soo much rage its almost he has the stregth of 10 men, this time Dark Barbarian charge it felt like a heard of rinos where going mad daen rha tried to move but he was too afraid to do so, closer and closer Dark Barbarian came, he jumped up and slashed Daen Rha in half. Dark Barbarian tore Daen Rhas heart out with his bare hands and when he was done a chest appeard in front of him it was filled with powerful weapons he has never seen before, he took it all and walked back home and gave the heart to the king Dark Barbarian was soo rich and the king ask "do you wish to be my General?"
Dark Barbarian replied with and yes and he was a General. To be Continud


Next will be the great battle.

Dark Barbarian got the rank of General and lead his army into battle. He killed a lot of syrtis at herberd fort, once he got the fort all of a sudden some cloud was heading to the fort all looked up Dark Barbarian said "GET YOUR ASSES TO COVER ITS A ARROW CLOUD" every one got to cover as a rain of arrows hit the fort, Dark Barbarian heard some of his men dieing but most Servived. As the rain of arrow stoped their was one conjuerer there it was Isemon that conj the cloud of arrows. Dark Barbarian was no match for him, out of no where Wyatt appeard to aid Dark Barbarian. General Wyatt and his mage army came.Then Isemon called his syrtis army. yet again a mage came out of no where near the fort. it was a Warlock name Batlin. Batlin cast spike field and half the syrtis army was killed. Batlin cast a more powerful spell it was a huge meteor and it detroyed the whole syrtis army takeing Isemon with it. at last herbred was in ignis control. To be cont'd



Next is the battle for Eferias castle

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[Anpu]

When will be a chapter about your fight with Rios at Ignis Orc Camp?

[UmarilsStillHere]

When will be a chapter about your fight with Rios at Ignis Orc Camp?

xD (someassortedtexttofill10charlimit)

[NotScias]

Chapter 5 Aggersborg Strike.
...
Next is the Siege of Imperia Castle

No offense but I didn't understand anything... maybe because it's the morning (?)
Could someone make a translation ?

[Mattdoesrock]

No offense but I didn't understand anything... maybe because it's the morning (?)
Could someone make a translation ?

DB and da gr8 eferenendni went to Aggers, which had been turned into a mining fort (?) by Rhanya.

She then single handedly pwned the Ignis army and killed Efrendi.

[Orimae]

Loved the story DB

Just wondering, will the continude have nekkids in it?

I swear he mentions nekkid sumi...he is def on mah do not res list..for good XD

Nice stories tho Db, good job

[SlackerLinux2]

I swear he mentions nekkid sumi...he is def on mah do not res list..for good XD

Nice stories tho Db, good job

well kasumi hasn't been wearing pants since the update.

anyway good stories.

[Hamster_of_sorrow]

well kasumi hasn't been wearing pants since the update.

anyway good stories.

its because of my shiny pants. they have that effect on people :P

[Orimae]

well kasumi hasn't been wearing pants since the update.

anyway good stories.

ITS NOT MAH FAULT!!!!!

/me points at NGD :¬¬:

oh and fyi...she be fixed now...

[Hamster_of_sorrow]

oh and fyi...she be fixed now...

WHAT?!? they nerfed my shiny pants?!? how is that possible since NGD themselves would have to succumb to the power of the shiny pants in the first place!!!

/me wonders if Fighting Irish's purple pants got nerfed too


well... either way, im glad that your hunter is fixed.

[Syd_Vicious]

I just got 2 quick questions:

1. How could Poe ambush you without firing an arrow on you? Was it a dance ambush? A Rasberry Ambush? A pie ambush? a boogie man ambush? Sounds like he AFK ambushed you.

2. Why siege the castle if your army is decimated, your general is dead and your main conju is stuck in a crystal punctuation mark outside of the fort you just got whooped at; without landing a single blow? ( I know you mean hibernation, but still its a funny visual image)

Intrigued reads would wanna know xD

[UmarilsStillHere]

I could tell you what I think of the quality of these storys, but It may come across a little harsh. So I wont, yet. :angel1:

[Mbwana]

WHAT?!? they nerfed my shiny pants?!? how is that possible since NGD themselves would have to succumb to the power of the shiny pants in the first place!!!

/me wonders if Fighting Irish's purple pants got nerfed too


well... either way, im glad that your hunter is fixed.

rofl xD

(10char:p)

[Vythica]

When will be a chapter about your fight with Rios at Ignis Orc Camp?

You're a dick Anpu. This comment is out of line and you know it. This is why no one other than your harem of clannies likes you.
Like making fun of handicapped people? Jerk. Rios doesn't even bring that up. Why? Because he has a smidgen of class, unlike yourself.

[fluffy_muffin]

You're a dick Anpu. This comment is out of line and you know it. This is why no one other than your harem of clannies likes you.
Like making fun of handicapped people? Jerk. Rios doesn't even bring that up. Why? Because he has a smidgen of class, unlike yourself.

Does being handicapped allow you to do and say just anything without any social-consequences? BTW. why are you forcing that his disablity to write in more or less proper english or even use some spell checking is caused by Asperger? I can undestand that he can have semantic-pragmatic problems and yes it might be caused by Asperger. But my point is that he can fight with it [spell-check, posts edition, less posts etc.]
Vinth if you will point out in every conversation that he has some disablity you will put him in to a frame "Poor DB". This way you will alienate him and justify all his actions which is wrong IMVHO

[Vythica]

Does being handicapped allow you to do and say just anything without any social-consequences? BTW. why are you forcing that his disablity to write in more or less proper english or even use some spell checking is caused by Asperger? I can undestand that he can have semantic-pragmatic problems and yes it might be caused by Asperger. But my point is that he can fight with it [spell-check, posts edition, less posts etc.]
Vinth if you will point out in every conversation that he has some disablity you will put him in to a frame "Poor DB". This way you will alienate him and judge all his actions which is wrong IMVHO

You apparently didn't understand what I was talking about, or the insult that Anpu slid in under people's noses. He was referring to a PvP that Rios and DB had and they posted it on youtube to make fun of DB. Do some research before you run your mouth.

[fluffy_muffin]

You apparently didn't understand what I was talking about, or the insult that Anpu slid in under people's noses. He was referring to a PvP that Rios and DB had and they posted it on youtube to make fun of DB. Do some research before you run your mouth.

You are rude and you expect from others to be polite?
I was referring to all your posts about DB not to this particular one. And yes i am not up to date with your horus civil wars, sorry.

[Anpu]

Let us start from the beginning. It was comment directed to DB, so if he didn't like it and wished to be removed from his thread he could
1) pm me about it, and I would remove it with no problem or
2) report post
Which means I do not need to reply on your flaming under mask that you re worried for DB (and Fluffy already explained that part good enough). The way you posted wasn't meant to point me on something "wrong", but obviously to flame.

PvP existed with or without that video. News about it I got from IRC room, I watched movie later. As he was describing his epic battles, I commented if he will describe that one too with his own words (it is not a secret he wanted that PvP badly). I didn't ask him to describe video you are mentioning. That is a big difference. If you find video insulting, please contact its publisher.

For the rest of your comments about how "loved" I am on Horus, I am flattered you are following my status on server. Makes me feel special. Not.

[Vythica]

Of course you did nothing wrong. You'd never admit to it anyway. Stupid of me to bring it up. In all the time I've played I've never seen you apologize for anything, don't know why it'd be different now. My bad. :fingers:

[PT_DaAr_PT]

/me requests a special chapter for the second annaversary

[Dark_Barbarian]

i wont write the next chapter till my knight reachs the next level so you have to wait or get a conj to help him grind simple as that.

[PT_DaAr_PT]

I guess that means never. :/