Tale of Jack Darkshadow, Greg's son

Dark_Barbarian · 08-22-2010, 06:03 AM

Chapter 1 The Birth

Greg has conqerd all of the continent but a new threat lays in another Continent far to the west. all though unaware what lays ahead they rally the people for mass migration by ship they sail to the new land but what they didn't know is its just like regnum continent but there are no Igneos instead there are Dinosaurs but they where tamed by the elves to protect there forests from out siders.

On the Capital ship called the Challenger Serena was giving birth to a new born Greg saw her giving birth and out came a son. Greg and Serena hugged each other to see their child been born. Greg couldn't think of names but Serena wanted to name him after her father "Jack". The new born was named Jack and the last name Darkshadow from his father fit into place and now his Journey into the world is gonna be unfolded.

Pizdzius · 08-22-2010, 09:34 AM

Imagine that you write a book. To write a book you have to present some sort of standard, an interesting story and creative way of describing things.
You just write whatever comes into your mind, it's not even interesting, there's no point or overall plot, you do not keep any form of literature known to keep this story in one tight form. Not to mention your bad, slightly improving, but still bad grammar and punctuation.

Dannboy · 08-22-2010, 10:11 AM

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Originally Posted by Pizdzius

Imagine that you write a book. To write a book you have to present some sort of standard, an interesting story and creative way of describing things.
You just write whatever comes into your mind, it's not even interesting, there's no point or overall plot, you do not keep any form of literature known to keep this story in one tight form. Not to mention your bad, slightly improving, but still bad grammar and punctuation.

It has improved A LOT since I saw him for the first time. Let him do what he wants to :3
I mean, I read it.

KKharzov · 08-22-2010, 10:11 AM

Errrrrrrr....

Regnum continent, elves taming dinosaurs, and epic finish: "and now his Journey into the world is gonna be unfolded."

Yeah. Trying to roleplay or something? Thats not even a proper paragraph let alone a chapter but.. ok.

Pizdzius · 08-22-2010, 12:09 PM

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Originally Posted by Dannboy

It has improved A LOT since I saw him for the first time. Let him do what he wants to :3
I mean, I read it.

Yeah I can play tic-tac-toe but I enjoy Rengum Online more.

Dannboy · 08-22-2010, 02:21 PM

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Originally Posted by Pizdzius

Yeah I can play tic-tac-toe but I enjoy Rengum Online more.

I dont get it(Your comment, that is). Just dont read his stories? Like I enjoyed you making 4 topics in 2 days.
Anyway, I got a lot of bullshit when I ripped on him and I got all the hed not normal piss. I thought you were caring enough not to do the same mistake as me...
I for one like the fucked up and random stories of DB. And I have no idea what you meant by that comment. First of all I dont know what tic tac toe is, but it must surely be better than regnum at times

And this is not about him making better stories, its about him doing what he wants.
Why dont you go bitch at someone posting bad drawings or bad movies just because they arent as good as your stuff.
And yes, I am on my period, thanks for noticing.

Thanks for the Red karma btw.

Pizdzius · 08-24-2010, 10:14 AM

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Originally Posted by Dannboy

Why dont you go bitch at someone posting bad drawings or bad movies just because they arent as good as your stuff.
And yes, I am on my period, thanks for noticing.

Thanks for the Red karma btw.

First of all, any red karma I've given in last week was for someone who posted venting furious threads lately.
Second, I would never post such things. I don't write stories and then go around and tell people theirs are worse. I think only teenagers would do that.
I just pointed out for DB the essentials that he should work on, I did not call his stuff bullshit. (As I already posted another advice some time ago, he seemed to pull some thought from it). I am trying to be helpful and give an advice as I'm kinda older and more experienced (including stuff I do and people read it). Maybe that's why people (besides you, of course) aren't angry with me. I'm kind, I do not "rip on him".

Of course you enjoy his random stories, as I see, you did not clearly got what I've written, you don't have to get much to be amused. Have fun

blood-raven · 08-24-2010, 07:58 PM

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Originally Posted by Pizdzius

First of all, any red karma I've given in last week was for someone who posted venting furious threads lately.

was it me?

no realy, where are the new episodes of da story?

08-22-2010, 06:03 AM	#1
Dark_Barbarian Initiate Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Delaware USA Posts: 211	Tale of Jack Darkshadow, Greg's son Chapter 1 The Birth Greg has conqerd all of the continent but a new threat lays in another Continent far to the west. all though unaware what lays ahead they rally the people for mass migration by ship they sail to the new land but what they didn't know is its just like regnum continent but there are no Igneos instead there are Dinosaurs but they where tamed by the elves to protect there forests from out siders. On the Capital ship called the Challenger Serena was giving birth to a new born Greg saw her giving birth and out came a son. Greg and Serena hugged each other to see their child been born. Greg couldn't think of names but Serena wanted to name him after her father "Jack". The new born was named Jack and the last name Darkshadow from his father fit into place and now his Journey into the world is gonna be unfolded.

08-22-2010, 09:34 AM	#2
Pizdzius Baron Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Polish Side of RA Posts: 779	Imagine that you write a book. To write a book you have to present some sort of standard, an interesting story and creative way of describing things. You just write whatever comes into your mind, it's not even interesting, there's no point or overall plot, you do not keep any form of literature known to keep this story in one tight form. Not to mention your bad, slightly improving, but still bad grammar and punctuation. __________________ Pizdzius Swedzioszek Leader of CBA Regnum Comic <- my Regnum Comic , RSS version -> RSS (if you wish to contact me on my other realm character: Ignis - Josephine)

08-22-2010, 10:11 AM	#4
KKharzov Banned Join Date: Jul 2010 Location: Land of the free, home of the dead Posts: 125	Errrrrrrr.... Regnum continent, elves taming dinosaurs, and epic finish: "and now his Journey into the world is gonna be unfolded." Yeah. Trying to roleplay or something? Thats not even a proper paragraph let alone a chapter but.. ok.