Horus stories

Altara · 01-18-2010, 05:00 PM

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Originally Posted by Gawyn_Trakkand

Jokes aside you do need to look at spelling DB, i know i'm getting ridden a bit by vythica to watch my grammer and spelling but thats an aweful lot of obvious errors. If you are serious about writing stories then why not get a friend to proof read and correct them for you?

Grammar*
awful*
And you should use Capital I's dear :[[

haha. Jokes aside
Good story DB Cant wait for the next

Immune · 01-18-2010, 05:06 PM

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Originally Posted by Altara

Grammar*
awful*
And you should use Capital I's dear :[[

haha. Jokes aside
Good story DB Cant wait for the next

Lol I saw those earlier but I didn't want to be the one to point them out. Not this time at least.

Mattdoesrock · 01-18-2010, 05:24 PM

Gawyn mate, sorry, but you've been replaced.

Pwnography · 01-18-2010, 05:26 PM

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Originally Posted by Mattdoesrock

Gawyn mate, sorry, but you've been replaced.

Yup,this is mutiny

Comp · 01-18-2010, 05:33 PM

Once upon a time, in a land far, far away where the wind blew and the winters were cold, lived an elder goat named Inkster. Inkster lived off the land, eating twigs, berries, and grass until one day he realized.......HOLY F*CK I gotta take a dump!!

Inkster ran to the bushes with haste and pushed...pushed...and pushed for hours until finally - PLOP! Out came a mighty SH*T who was tough as nails and sneakier than herpies....yes - twas Compost!

The end!

Flightcap · 01-18-2010, 05:49 PM

Hijaaaaacked! We need new threads for these new storylines, or a separate fansite, or something to keep authors from getting mixed together.

Good stories all though! Compost........

Inkster · 01-18-2010, 06:09 PM

'the wind blows,

In the wind, the mages hear from afar... INKSTER will never come to our aid

Angel_de_Combate · 01-19-2010, 12:03 PM

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Originally Posted by Flightcap

Hijaaaaacked! We need new threads for these new storylines, or a separate fansite, or something to keep authors from getting mixed together.

+1 for this

Mbwana · 01-19-2010, 02:52 AM

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Originally Posted by Mattdoesrock

Gawyn mate, sorry, but you've been replaced.

alas and indeed....hey! since everyone's doing it, maybe I should write something myself

(nice writing Grain, and Gawyn: hurry up! your fans are leaving you

)

bois · 01-21-2010, 12:44 PM

Sorry DB I could not read through it all. The whole block is an irritating mass of white for me (not the storyline).

Try to break your paragraphs into blocks with spaces like I did here. One thought per paragraph . The readability is poor.
The story may be good but I simply will not get a headache trying to read through the one compacted mass. Sorry mate.

I will read your next instalment providing the readability improves.

Regards
Artec

01-18-2010, 05:24 PM	#3
Mattdoesrock Count Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: England, UK. Posts: 1,055	Gawyn mate, sorry, but you've been replaced. __________________ MattdoesJOKE_#40_NOT_FOUND RA / Hor... Haven?

01-18-2010, 05:33 PM	#5
Comp Count Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Jippy's Mom's House Posts: 1,286	How Compost Came To Be.... Once upon a time, in a land far, far away where the wind blew and the winters were cold, lived an elder goat named Inkster. Inkster lived off the land, eating twigs, berries, and grass until one day he realized.......HOLY FCK I gotta take a dump!! Inkster ran to the bushes with haste and pushed...pushed...and pushed for hours until finally - PLOP! Out came a mighty SHT who was tough as nails and sneakier than herpies....yes - twas Compost! The end! __________________ Compost (60 Hunter) Alsius Compoundious (Dead and gone...)

01-18-2010, 05:49 PM	#6
Flightcap Apprentice Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Iowa, USA Posts: 81	Hijaaaaacked! We need new threads for these new storylines, or a separate fansite, or something to keep authors from getting mixed together. Good stories all though! Compost........ __________________ Fight for the right! ~~Reclamation of Horus~~ Flightcap - Syrtis 45 conjurer

01-18-2010, 06:09 PM	#7
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01-21-2010, 12:44 PM	#10
bois Count Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Trinidad and Tobago Posts: 1,194	Sorry DB I could not read through it all. The whole block is an irritating mass of white for me (not the storyline). Try to break your paragraphs into blocks with spaces like I did here. One thought per paragraph . The readability is poor. The story may be good but I simply will not get a headache trying to read through the one compacted mass. Sorry mate. I will read your next instalment providing the readability improves. Regards Artec